A tractor-trailer containing diesel fuel collided with another trailer early this morning on I-790, leaving two dead and 20 injured.
At 6:45 a.m., two tractor-trailers crashed into one another, causing a destructive chain reaction involving two other tractor-trailers and 14 cars. Adding to the mayhem, one of the trailers was hauling highly volatile diesel fuel. “It was very lucky that it didn’t roll over or dump any fuel or catch fire,” said Sgt. Albert Wei of the local police.
While the driver of the diesel-truck was unharmed, there were two confirmed fatalities and at least 20 injured, four with life-threatening injuries. All of the local fire department’s ambulances were dispatched along with those of four other neighboring towns and a helicopter from Memorial Hospital.
Fire chief Tony Sullivan likened the scene to a war zone when he arrived. There were “bodies laying along the road, people covered in blood sitting next to their cars.” In his 18 and a half years with the fire department, he had never known such carnage. Amid the chaos, police officers couldn’t tell drivers from passengers or who belonged to which car, remarked Wei.
Natascha, I really like your lead. It is short and to the point. It wasn't sensationalized at all and yet it still made me want to read the story. Nice job!
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed reading your story it is well organized and you used great adjectives that made it interesting (like mayhem, carnage, chaos and destructive chain reaction.)
I struggled a bit with deciding how to write the part about the five local ambulances plus the one's from nearby cities and you did a great job with that, too.
Keep up the good work, I look forward to reading your next story.
I like your lead it was real to the point and made me want to read it right off the bat.
ReplyDeleteI alos like the creative adjectives used!
You really summed up the story nicely, making it easy to read. One thing I noticed that may seem a bit repetitive - the part about the diesel fuel is written in two spots. I caught that in yours because I caught the same thing in mine just before hitting the "publish" button.
ReplyDeleteNice job on your lead! Reading that a tractor-trailer containing diesel fuel collided with another truck got my attention. It made me want to read more to see how bad of an accident it was.
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